Crying For War

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Crying For War

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Hello friends!

So recently, I got a random motivation that I am sure many people get in their life, and that was to write a novel!

(FYI, whenever I mention "Gov." I am talking about the Government, not Governor)

I am only 15, and I honestly don't care that I am young, hahaha, pretty much, without giving too much away, there is a man who is starting to see a lot of flaws in the U.S. Government, and begins gathering an army of people to fight back at the Gov. Also, there is a Governor who also sees the ways of the Gov., is appauled, and immediately resigns to begin peaceful efforts at solving these problems, while meanwhile, the man who is recruiting an army wants to end the corruption by force. The biggest threat is the U.S. Government being forced to launch a full nuclear attack on its people who are rebelling, and the main objective of the Gov. is to avoid that happening. Eventually, the Governor meets up with the man raising an army (I keep calling him this because he doesn't have a name yet) and they decide to join efforts in taking down the U.S. Government.

So anyways, it is a three part series, which looks kind of like this (I'm not sure if I will put the man recruiting people in book one or two, I am thinking probabally 2):

Part 1 - The man figuring out the U.S. Gov.'s major flaws & The Governor resigning/beginning efforts of peaceful negotiations (or something along those lines) [The way this will work is with each chapter, it will switch from the man's perspective to the Governor's perspective/story]

Part 2 - The man/Governor joining forces and beginning 'under-ground' operations to slowly begin to take down the Gov. (I don't quite know what else will go into this one yet)

Part 3 - Pretty much, an all out war between the the U.S. Government and the man's army begins, and the threat of a nuclear war is on the rise, as the man's army is also building nuclear weapons (idk about that part yet with the man's army having nukes too). (I don't want to give anything else away for this one).

So, my question for all of you, what would you guys like to see included in the main battle? For example, certain methods of warfare, certain people doing certain things (that was really specific[sarcasm]), etc. Anything at all that you think would really make it just the most epic fight scene you have ever read :)

Thanks everyone!

**On a side note, when making suggestions about the battle scene, think of it like this: you have read many good books I assume, and the ones with great action scenes just give you the chills anytime you read it, that is pretty much the effect I am going for**

***On a side side note, please when making suggestions for the battle scene, if you reference specific weapons ,make sure they are realistic, because this is based in modern day America***

****On a side side side note, feel free to make any other comments, suggestions, or ask any questions about this work in progress also!****

Thanks again!
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I think the main thing is that the fight is about principles - fighting is just a means, not the end. Further more, the fighting often ends in situations where you can't maintain the principles you stand on. So you win the battle, but lose the principle war.

Inside of that, some of the nuances of a situation - just how X is here and Y is there, can have the world turning effect on principles.
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Rather write on the story itself. Battles don`t mean that much in books. Some are epic, true, but it depends in which context. Just 2 US armies having a stand of isn`t quite the right context. ( I`m thinking huge Orcs and Dragons ready to rip any elf open )

ANyway, I would focus on the story. What is wrong with the government? Why is it wrong? How can it be solved et cetera? The battle scenes should either be from like a general`s perspective ( delegating troops ) or from first person, someone actually experiencing the war.

Just my 2 cents.
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you are talking about a sensitive subject that will be horrifically hard to get right.
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all very good input! And halls, I have thought about that too, so I think instead of modern U.S. I will probabally make it pretty much the same story but with a made up government system from a made up country or something like that, so pretty much not on earth, but im not sure, I still need to figure that bit out
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